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The sun shines through the clouds
Peircing the calm waters before us
The wind dances all around
I have seen roses bloom
But none compare to my love
A sigh escapes my lips
As our bodies continue to be one
And our embrace never ends
But my eyes open
And see that you were never there
And lay in the darkness of my room again
©2007-2008 ~X-TheEternal-X
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~FalseEmperor:iconFalseEmperor: Oct 1, 2007, 4:17:45 PM
I really really like it. The last two lines aren't what you expected. I mean everything before that is building up and is joyous and warm and right at the end it all fades into something cold and lonely. At least that's how I read it. Still awesome job.

~Nathaniel

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God Forgives.... I don't
~X-TheEternal-X:iconX-TheEternal-X: Oct 1, 2007, 4:38:26 PM
Thank you! xD I meant for that, it is hard for me to write something without some form of lonely element to it.

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~Things aren't always as we perceive.~
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